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Beautiful imagery of seeing a loved ones brokenness through the eyes of understanding and care… really nice 🙏

The intimate language is great, I can feel and taste the sensory merging love… 🥰

Beautiful language indeed. Especially the imagery of broken glass as a way to let out feelings.

Thank you and I actually agree with you suggestion about the word change, I appreciate it 🙂

I love the word choices and the imagery, especially the optimistic last stanza and the overall tone that this is something that happens “again and again”, that you demonstrate through repetition. 

My one nitpick here is the second stanza; “Let it bleed out - your sorrow”, I feel would flow better if you got rid of the second line. “Let your sorrow bleed out - and let it flow - into beauty”. 

Just a suggestion though, beautiful poem!

What is most beautiful for me is that every group of pieces can form different verses that still compose a beautiful poem

Darling,-
Your heart is like-
An open wound

Let your sorrow bleed out-
And let it flow-
Into beauty

My love,-
Your eyes are like -
Broken windows

And I am grateful-
You let this draft-
Of intimacy and care-
Breeze right through-
Dropping the curtains-
To the ground

Letting the light bear witness-
To this mess-
These beautiful broken pieces-
That we can gather up-
And put back together-
Again and again

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https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/ycs6vx/freshly_bathed_jewels/?utm_source=share&amp;utm_medium=ios_app&amp;utm_name=iossmf

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Beautiful broken pieces