I am in love with how you started and ended this poem! I took it as insipiration in my recent submission. Well, almost ;) I put a little tweak on the repeating opening and closing line idea. 

I cant wait to see your growth!

Not intention, I’m just admittedly horrible at catching me errors. Thanks for catching that one, I’ll give it another edit!

Are the grammatical errors intentional? If so, you would need to include more throughout to get the desired effect, otherwise a few edits are definitely needed. 
> I’ve been think a lot,    
>Cause I’m can’t


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Really good pacing , it's obviously very heartfelt and emotionally poignant

Almost 

Since you left  
I’ve lost twelve pounds   
Taken up smoking  
Decided I don’t particularly care  
To do anything of importance   
With my next fifty.  
So I’ve been staying up late   
Debating the merits of granite versus slate.  
And I’ve been think a lot,    
About unlearning people permanence   
Cause I can’t seem to get it right.  
And I finally developed a sense  
For the humor of this universe   
If you don’t think too hard   
It’s kind of funny   
How one of these days   
Your tumor will take its second life.  
And so I’m laughing   
When life takes a swing at me  
With everything I’ve ever wanted  


Well,   
Almost. 

&amp;#x200B;

Feedback:

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