As in you liked the anchor and balloon metaphor?

That's a relief but I hope you continue exploring more of your use of metaphor, I forgot to mention it but I was really taken with the calling of the boat a balloon. Thanks for replying c:

You did NOT sound clunky!!! Thank you so much for your feedback, it means so much!!!!! I love hearing your thoughts about it!!!

I was very intrigued by this premise from the opening two lines; the use of the question as a title was really great, too. Especially for the contrast of the casual conversation opener versus the actual contents of the poem which are exploring some very vast thoughts going downwards like into the ocean like the anchor who let go of her balloon. Similarly, love how the gendering of the anchor evokes more of intrigue. This was my first comment on OCP so I apologise if I sound clunky but I really did want to praise this poem 💞

Thank you for your feedback and kind words!!!

I love the simplicity and selection of words you’ve used for this poem. It feels clear and strong, and evokes a nostalgic kind of sadness for me.

Ah thank you so much!!!! And get spiritual, I love it!!!!

"I have to apologize to my heart

for the greasy mess

i got us into"

DUDE. not to get all spiritual but this is why I believe in the Divine, because this is what Oneness of living and experiencing life is all about. A stranger living an entirely different life than mine is still able to capture what I'm feeling in this exact moment? How is that not Divine? 

Amazing!


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There was an oil spill

In my soul.

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I have to apologize to my heart

For the greasy mess

I got us into.

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I burned off my anger.

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Now all that’s left

Is to drown in sadness.

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Is my purpose to sink

Like an anchor

Who let go

Of her balloon?

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\- s.g.

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