Inspiration is good! Keep writing cool stuff for us to read

Y'all have made me want to write more, so I thank you for that. So, I shall continue to write. This one was fun to write, especially as I'm experimenting with rhyme schemes and such. There's also a lot packed in here meaning-wise, and it'll be interesting to see how much of it people can uncover.

Heh. It certainly won’t get much lighter, I prefer to write about the things people don’t talk about. Just because people shy away from dark topics doesn’t mean others don’t need to hear about them.

I’ll check out some of your other work when I get a moment. Very bleak and macabre, my kind of stuff.

I also somewhat intended that in relationship to feeling unhappy with being suppressed by society, hence blue usually being associated with malcontent and negativity. Certainly one of the better things I've put down thus far.

I like the imagery you conjure up with the “wheel turned blue from forced compliance” line. 

The human machine rolling towards it’s death, each spoke (person) a deathly blue pallor. 

Damn good stuff.

Great work! (Especially liked the phrase “spoke’s kin”)

Glad to see my intent has been fulfilled. 

Perhaps I will have to add this one to the collection...

the yearning for a voice we have resonates 

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i appreciate the use of imagery 

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this really made me think for a flash about how it applies to this machine we see today

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thanks for sharing

I really like your imagination: “the endless leads we walk, fractured identity”.  I describe how we have to live with a purpose. I can totally related. Keep up the good work!


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I really like the second but last stanza. It appealed to me.  “Silently picking up pieces of what we have tried to be ..”. Loved the poem. The only thing that can be improved is the flow… it jumps from one emotion to another… hard to follow.. had to read it a few times to understand it. Great work!!

'Cast a net and reel in violence'. Epic line. Great read

 When can we get some silence,   

for the people who feel broken,  

cast a net and reel in violence,   

muting those who are outspoken,  

wheel turned blue from forced compliance,  

those who spoke damned to the spoke’s kin,  

and we haven’t heard back for a while since.    

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The endless leads we walk, fractured identity.  

The fruitless seeds we sow, so patiently.  

The worthless reads we stalk, procured no I in Me.  

The hopeless weeds we grow, no personality.    

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Silently picking up pieces  

of what we have tried to be, but   

quietly making up peace is  

harder than it has to be, so    

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Kick up your feet and just run with it  

pick up the peace and just piece it in  

stick up your cleats and just find a fit  

for all of those who spoke, damned to the spoke’s kin.    

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Spokes of the Silenced