Sonnet describing the longing of the Mistress in absence of her

Thank you for sharing this sonnet. A thing I like about poetry is discover words I knew not. This piece of poetry did that for me. Plus, the poem expressed the feeling of agitation that animates the soul while we are longing for something or someone.

I really love the use of sonnet here, it’s so intriguing and adds a lot of depth to the double entendres in here, and the use of ‘eye aye’ in this form is so interesting. This is the kind of poem I would love to hear read aloud by a couple different people in a row to hear all the different meanings that could be drawn out with inflection. Keep up the good work, would love to see this become part of a sonnet series!

Well written. I definitely would like to see more in the same style. It is very clear that the poet finds relief from despair just by thinking of the mistress.

Your diction is amazing, and very fitting for the topic of the poem. Your poem is quite Shakespearean in nature, especially in the reference to the speaker's "mind's eye." All in all, a great, pleasant poem to read.

Brilliant!

I loved "seeing thee is worth a thousand dreams," and "thy name alone intoxicateth me". Such beautiful and romantic lines in a great sonnet.

This was beautiful. I enjoyed the way it played against my mind.

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Love it! The “eye aye” is very fun to say and adds to the poem. I enjoy the grammatical structure of your sentences, how verbs can follow their objects or the displacement of words in order to achieve the rhymes. The couplet is so powerful, love the ending