the 3 beginning lines flow so well and i love thisss

 The words flow like butter when read out loud, everything works so well. The imagery is pretty good as well. Great piece. Keep writing.

Is it the feeling that you have to mush taken from you, or the want to share as much as possible.  What is taken from you is a scary thought and I liked how you wrote it as thievery but with a hint of romance, as if the one who takes away is the ones who hands it was meant for all along.

The first three lines flow really well. It gives a great physical visualization with Bleeds and wet. I think maybe i would have a bit more of a desired impact if there were more punctuation The last line feels out of place for me but by itself is very romantic and beautiful!


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Winter robs me cold and dry

Summer bleeds me wet and muddy

And here's you who robs my

Soul every day and night


Note:
Trying new forms of romance.

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The Seasons Robs Me Cold and Hot