[2706] Jupiter Free Press; Chapter 1

Hi!

Jupiter Free Press is an 80k cyberpunk novel about two women writing an underground newspaper on Ganymede Station. Here is the first chapter. I'd really love to make this as polished as possible! Thank you!

Link to my work: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1lgowwFZRvIGuNrvAdlcvf_brqoyhqPk8gfzVWN6ipgw/edit?usp=sharing

Links to my critiques:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/zyf0p1/1343_someone_forgotten/j27hoed/?context=3 [1343]

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/zyn3b0/619_acorn/j27cule/?context=3 [619]

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/zyiq6e/1677_how_improv_helped_me_deal_with_social_anxiety/j27945h/?context=3 [1667]