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Am I out of the loop? I haven't heard anything about this show, but I loved it. Archive 81 is an eight-episode series on Netflix. My guess is it's a single season -- things seemed wrapped up(ish) at the end. It is more creepy than scary and more peeling-back-layers-of-mystery than jump scares. If you're a fan of slow-burn shows about cults, witches, and beings from other planes, this show will hit the spot.

I've got zucchini plants nearing the end of the season. A few leaves have signs of powdery mildew. Is it safe to put these leaves in my backyard compost? I've heard powdery mildew is ubiquitous in the soil, so it should make no difference if it's in my compost. But I don't want to contaminate my garden if I'm wrong. I'd love to hear the community's perspective.

I'm approaching my limit on the number of critiques allowed for a query. Hopefully, this version is close enough to the final. Thank you everyone for your great tips and tricks.

Current version

Dear XXX,

Ashme is a New Mesopotamian—a Meso. She dreams of being a hero, fighting against the brutal Ostarrichi ruling her country. She is an indigo child, her DNA modified by sentient AI, enabling her to control computer systems at will. With this power, she has something to offer the Meso resistance. Her twin brother, Shen, however, suffers from a genetic disorder and needs someone to care for him. Increasingly, that burden falls on her.

How can she become the hero her people need when

Modified based on past feedback. Thank you one and all for your insights.

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New version:

Dear XXX,

Ashme is a New Mesopotamian—a Meso. She dreams of being a hero, fighting against the brutal Ostarrichi ruling her country. She is an indigo child, her DNA modified by sentient AI, enabling her to control computer systems at will. With this power, she has something to offer the Meso resistance. Her twin brother, Shen, however, suffers from a genetic disorder and needs someone to care for him. Increasingly, that burden falls on her. How can she become the hero her people need when her brother’s needs are over

Retweaked based on past feedback. As always, I am grateful for your thoughts and advice.

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New Version

Dear XXX,

Ashme is a New Mesopotamian—a Meso. She yearns to fight the Ostarrichi, who came as refugees of an interstellar war but now rule over her home, systematically crushing her people.

Mason is an Ostarrichi. His dream is to create a society where his children can thrive. The war-like Mesos, however, threaten to burn his nation to ash.

Resistance armies gather their strength, promising to bring the Ostarrichi reign to an end. Ashme wants to join them,

Dear XXX,

Ashme is a New Mesopotamian—a Meso. She yearns to fight the Ostarrichi, who came as refugees of an interstellar war but now rule over her home, systematically crushing her people. Resistance armies gather their strength, however, promising to bring the Ostarrichi reign to an end. Ashme dreams of joining them, becoming her people’s hero. Her brother suffers from a genetic defect, though, and needs Ashme to be a sister, not a warrior. She must decide how best to keep her family safe. Should she leave her brother to fight for their home, or take him and run?

Mason is an Ostarrichi. His dream is to create a society where his children can thrive. The war-like Mesos, however, threa

This is a revised query based on feedback I received from PubTips several months ago. No interest from agents yet. I'd appreciate any feedback on this current version of my query. Thanks!

Dear (agent),

Something is attacking Kredo’s world. Across Duatero, a lost interstellar colony, crops fail and an ancient disease strikes, corrupting those infected and turning them against their own people. Kredo, a high-ranking holy warrior, and his team race to uncover and stop whatever is attacking their home. Their hunt takes them to ruins of long lost cities, isolated mountain capitals, and beyond the border of their lands into untamed alien forests.

As they search, Kredo learns that the knowledge

Dear r/PubTips,

Something is attacking Kredo’s world. Across Duatero, a lost interstellar colony, crops fail and disease strikes, corrupting those infected and turning them against their own people. Kredo, a high-ranking holy warrior, and his team race to uncover and stop whatever is attacking their home. Their hunt takes them to ruins of long lost cities, isolated mountain capitals, and beyond the border of their lands into untamed alien forests. As Kredo’s team grapple with an invisible enemy that has penetrated deep into the heart of their civilization, loyalties are shattered as it becomes impossible to tell who still fights for Duatero, and who has been contaminated by the enemy.

Duat