The story of us

god this poem is so good i want to cry. i absolutely adore poems that utilize heavy imagery and i loved your use of it in this: especially the lines "Wind batters the sand dunes and we pull our bodies in a little closer. / The faint taste of salt on our lips, noses colored vermilion." i also like how the "wind batters..." line relates to the, "our book has become weathered with use" line (or at least to me they relate) as the imagery of a wind-battered sand dune translates to a weathered book. beautiful imagery, beautiful poem, love is beautiful.

The fact that the first stanza of your writing so romantically proclaims the complexities of the soul is beautiful: "let me untangle your soul". It is quite a contrast you make between a person's complicated soul and simple love. The rest of your poem is written very delicately, although I cannot say I relate to having this type of pure love, nor do I want to. Some crave a love that is uncomplicated. I desire rapture and ecstasy. Your words, however, paint a picture of what it would be like to be in a companionship untainted by deeper desires of complexity and depth. Great job.

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