[1616] Rumor Has It

Hello,

I have submitted to this sub-reddit before and received some very useful feedback. After editing the first few pages of my story again, I am basically looking for your overall impression. Would you want to continue reading? How do you feel about the main character? Any other inputs regarding pace or clarity would also be appreciated :)

I will have to make edits to the rest of the story if you guys approve of this, so I want to get a sense of your overall thoughts about the opening before I go ahead and do that.

Thanks again for your help!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mXDqICmdI3USu2Me2I_LqvQpbw7vTgRPMqgRwCNXI-Q/edit?usp=sharing

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