[1923] Madre Beach - Chapter One

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This is a brief, prologue-style first section for a thriller. I made some adjustments after an earlier draft to clean up repetition and ramp up some of the tension. It's intended as a bit of a standalone story before the book, and it should be obvious why, so please evaluate it on whether it fulfills that role and makes you want to read the book. Thank you in advance.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1eJ49wt3GvJLxboMev8oc5vxEiprnNDBgC4nsAJfnH_c/edit