[2221] A killer's heart

So I have written a chapter of a new book that I started work on and wanted general feedback but mainly wanted to know your opinions about the character. I have tried to write him as being violently angry, smart, really weird but most importantly lonely. I'm not quite sure all of that comes through the text. The character is not meant to be likable but I wanted to know if he was interesting enough to make you keep reading?

Here is my story: Story

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