[864] Sector L7 Chp. 1 (version: who knows)

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I’m back, with yet another attempt at the introduction to chapter one of Sector L7. If you aren't familiar, Sector L7 is a book in progress about how Earth goes to shit from climate change and the only hope for survival may well be a sample of GMO bug shit.

I have taken into account everyone’s feedback and the result is a ‘calm before the storm’ type scene with Eagle Squad. The ending of this prose leads straight into a cleaned-up and heavily modified version of this post, which will conclude the first chapter with the waterfall jump. The plan is to alternative between Eagle Squad's pov and Cooper’s (my main character) chapter by chapter, until eventually their stories collide.

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Some questions I have:

1.) How do you feel about the use of omniscient 3rd person? Is there too much head hopping? The plan is to alternate between 3rd omniscient for Eagle Squad and 1st present for Cooper’s chapters.

2.) How’s the dialogue? Corny or believable?

3.) More setting? Or are there enough descriptions?

4.) Is there a good blend between mystery and reveal throughout?

5.) Would you read on?

[Edit] 6.) What character do you feel most attached to? Trying to decide who is worthy of surviving the cave encounter . . .

I can’t thank all of you enough for helping me grow as a writer—this is the best sub ever, no doubt about it. Cheers y’all!