[1939] Calbridge v.2

Hello again all!

This time, I've brought you a rework of my first post on this sub! This is part of the first chapter of a project I've given the working title Reign of Tyrants. Probably gonna change it, as it's a "The ___ of ___" title.

I've responded to the great critiques given by completely rewriting the passage. I'll leave a link to the original if you want to compare.

Without further ado, Calbridge v.2

Crits: 1803+ 892= 2695