[3105] Spy of the Mind (V2)

I really appreciate everyone who has given me feedback. In the previous version, I didn't really dive into the main character's magic as much until the second chapter. I added it sooner this time around, so please let me know if this is better to introduce at the beginning and if it helps explain Sonia's actions more. All feedback is welcome and thank you in advance!

My Story:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1kQ36G8q1t2OkcvOq_DbJfKyk_05lAoe7U3lE7ERRJ0U/edit?usp=sharing

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