[2963] The Happy Film Ver 2

Synopsis: Amidst the backdrop of Darwin, a restless traveler named Cale searches for companions for a daring expedition, only to encounter an array of wayward souls — from a spiritual guru to a troubled alcoholic — leading him to reevaluate his own quest and the meaning of connection.

Ver 2 and the bald spot on my scalp (from innumerable tearing-my hair-out sessions) would not have been possible withotu the insights, suggestions and generosity (and casutic humour) of DRs. Thanks.

Requests? Does the story hold up well? Are the POV short falls taken care of? Is there a better control of lyricism? Does the story need higher stakes? Prose-wise, it feels on the clunky side in terms of fluency but I want to check if other apects of the story are holding up?

Have a good night

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1933 Icy Roads

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2444 A bitter tea

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