[3513] Sea of Disquiet

Hello! I am proud to share the first story I've ever completed. Ironically, however, this piece is not it in its entirety but it's close enough where the plot and character arcs complete (for the most part - it's missing a 500 word epilogue). I've tried trimming it down where I could.

Story

Now, I understand since this is a 3K+ post that expectations are raised. The moderators informed me that my critiques are borderline given the word count, however, I hope nobody faults me for trying anyway. Given it's borderline, I will leave it to the community to decide whether this is considered leeching since I know members can report a post as such.

Crit cash:

[2109]

[2025]

[1660]