[1399] Which of these two stories about thieves is better?

These are snippets from the first chapters of two separate stories about thieves in a fantasy setting. Can you tell me which is more compelling?

Untitled Thief Story 1 [658]

Untitled Thief Story 2 [741]

Crit 1: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/18wk9z2/comment/kg03epb/?context=3

Crit 2: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/18wscxp/comment/kg06hav/?context=3

Crit 3: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/18skmw7/comment/kg10ebs/?context=3