[1403] With Edge Dulled (1/2)

Hi everyone I'm both a new writer and new to the reddit. My previous post had some issues due to length (still figuring this stuff out) so I split and reposted it here.

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A few questions I'd like answered.
Are there any parts of the story that felt boring to you? What were they and why? What would you do in order to make it more interesting?
Were there any parts of the story that was confusing? What were they and why?
Are there any parts that took you out of the story? What were they and why?
Were there any parts/elements of the story you thought were awesome, and that I shouldn't change/should try to write more of in future stories?
What is your opinion on my writing style?
What was the primary emotion/mood you felt when reading it?
Right now I'm trying to work on short stories in order to improve my writing. So if you have any advice for a new writer I'd love to hear it!
Thanks!

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Link to doc:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/17Z20h5vsJ11-jd2jpy5HGa3VvNK-0oniJyLmfoecRiM/edit?usp=sharing

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Critiques:
[2393] Chapter Two -Winds of Change
https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1bjq8wr/comment/kw9iobq/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3
[999] Two 500 word writing challenges
https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1bjtwge/comment/kvzs7f7/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3

[1457] The World of Desire [1]
https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1bnbxqr/comment/kwldmu6/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3

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