[2595] A Cold Day In November

Hi all, This is chapter one of a novel. It's been revised probably 10 times by this point. I posted earlier versions of it here, years ago.

In my opinion all feedback is good feedback. I can take harsh critiques. Don't be afraid to hurt my feelings. If this chapter sucks, I want to hear all about why it sucks. That's how I improve.

Also, I want to know if you would want to keep reading after this chapter.

My work: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1P3746tee3Bg7Cfr01KRQmuNtquXiImyHP-o8bQFbiKg/edit?usp=sharing

Thanks in advance.
V.

I haven't psoted here in a while and I really hope I don't get leeched. There was nothing as long as what I'm submitting up. So I critiqued the two longest submissions I saw. I know for something over 2500 words the 1:1 ratio has changed and the rules are kind of ambiguous. I'm really trying to not be a leech, but if what I critiqued isn't enough, I'm sorry and I will fix it and repost.

Recent critiques: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1bnq8gf/comment/kx82a2d/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1bjq8wr/comment/kx7ntcv/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button