[1621] It's Not What, It's Who

Hello everyone. I signed up for the collaborative contest thing, so I figure I should post a little something. I've posted before, but it's been a while. Thank you in advance for your time and energy: I'm mainly interested in how readable the writing is, and how it left you feeling, but any and all thoughts and feelings are welcome, of course. Please let me know as well if further crits from me are required here. Thank you!

It's Not What, It's Who

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