[1676] Finding Angie

Hello! First chapter of a finished novel, and I'm struggling with it. My first version was well-written but boring, so I'm trying something new, but I'm not sure if it works.

If you were an agent, would you request the full?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1vW1AhIKbhnyPxwMWzoD-qXTsnhMZx9X_SE5MQe_0SIk/edit?tab=t.0

Here's my critiques:

1221 Words: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1llx9kn/comment/n0sbsrf/?context=3

640 Words: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1lolr8a/comment/n0ol5ad/?context=3