[1372] Veins of Sarr

Crit 3100

This is the second chapter in my sci-fi thriller Veins of Sarr Chapter 2  (First is Here, but this is completely understandable without it). I’m grateful for pretty much any feedback!

These are the aims of the chapter:
-To demonstrate the main character’s connection to the ocean.
-To show the beginning of his relationship with his adopted brother (the story is based around him going missing)
-To be a relatively wholesome chapter, but to hint at underlying issues.
-In terms of prose, I’m not going for anything revolutionary. I want it to be clear, vivid, and enjoyable. 

Other notes: The main character is a semi-aquatic alien species, not a human. A lateral line is a pressure sensing organ found in fish.