[691]The Library Ghost-'Project Mia'

I am writing a dark academia novel and this is my 2nd post. Learning from the 1st one, I want to clarify that:

1.This is NOT the first chapter- its NEAR the end so the character dynamics have been established. 2. This is a scene, not a completed chapter. 3. This is my first time in serious writing- not just middle school assignments, so really looking for genuine feedback.

My story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/18tNac6INkZhxUFlqgKOwBb15HXFTtvjFn1D776zsMS8/edit?usp=sharing

My critique: https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1tx7m1c/728_my_first_week_of_writing/oqds30j/

My old post: https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1tydjgv/1196the_library_ghostthe_sleep_over/