[3822] Tyrantland - Chapter 1 (Colonial Fantasy)

Critiques:

[720] Nowadays

[1165] Epilogue, Literary Fiction

[2400] Mosaic Chapters

[3474] Testament to the Glowing East - The Father (1 of 2)

Revisions from an earlier post. I've taken down the old link, but you can find the feedback here.

I'm not necessarily looking for feedback on the success of applying my prior feedback, just anything that will help me out. Two key things I want to know about is the success of the meeting with the one-eared man, and if it creates a bizarre-enough effect (it's supposed to illicit more confusion and menace than anything else), and I want to know if the main character's characterisation is clear, with his goals and stakes more early known.

For the sake of clarity (as there are maps and a quote preceding this chapter), this takes place in a counter-world, not Earth, so feedback rooted in real-world history is not useful to me here.

Thank you for your time reviewing this. I appreciate all feedback, no matter how harsh.

Link to chapter 1