I like the general ideas of the poem, although I think the way you write about them is a bit vague...try writing some specific images rather than 'I want to tear it apart'- show me what you want to tear and create a picture in the readers mind.

I think your writing could improve if you used less "to be" verbs and compressed what you are trying to say in shorter stanzas. For example  make the second line " I want to be,  I ought to be" Thanks for looking at [mine](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/4618rm/vacancy19862016/). 



Thanks for the advice. English isn't my native language, so that might be the reason for my basic choice of words.

> I have never written a poem before and I have no idea if I'm doing it right or not, but I'd like to know if this is good

Don't put this before your work. It's like a shitty picture frame on a work of art. Take the mask off all the way.

I like your poem a lot. Other than what has already been said, I think you could benefit from a little formatting. Maybe use stanzas? You don't have to though. Also, you use very simple and concise language which is good but know that if you feel like experimenting, your poem could benefit from some more colorful vocabulary.

I have never written a poem before and I have no idea if I'm doing it right or not, but I'd like to know if this is good

&gt;Home

&gt;That's where my closest friend is, it is myself

&gt;He is who I want to be, he is who I ought to be

&gt;Home with nothing to fear inside

&gt;No need to hide behind

&gt;That mask

&gt;Getting rid of it is the hardest task

&gt;See, I wear it when I'm outside

&gt;For me to hide behind

&gt;So that they can't see

&gt;The person that I call 'me'

&gt;Sometimes I want to tear it apart

&gt;For them to take a look at what is in my heart

&gt;And I hope that they will relate

&gt;And tell me that they're in the same state

&gt;That I am not alone

&gt;But that I am home

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/45uyug/to_my_future_valentine/d01yitd

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/45nihi/heartbroken/d01yol3