Goodbye Felix

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It all began when you were eight
Many years ago
You became my first and only friend
Inseparable, we were

We'd go for walks around the block
Across the bridge and stream
"Not too close to the edge," you'd say
"I don't want you to fall."

Then on your birthday, when you were twelve
It all began to change
Football with friends replaced our walks
But still, I understood

You were turning into a young man
We weren't always as close
But still, you'd give me bits of your food
And hug me everyday

And then one day, when you were old
You left with all your bags
Your parents smiled and wished you luck
But I hoped that you'd come back

I haven't seen you much since then
And your parents aren't like you
They never hug me like you did
I think I'm in their way

So now I'm back at the bridge and stream
It's time I left you be
I'll never forget you, my only friend
The way that you forgot me


MY CRITIQUES:
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/46jnt1/not_being_there/
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/46l6fl/do_you_wanna_dance/

Posted Feb 19, 2016, 7:23 PM UTC · edited

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