This came off as a very 'sweet' poem. To the point, and there wasn't a whole lot of elevated diction, which I find can sometimes distract from a piece. The simple language made it feel very authentic if that makes  sense. There also seemed to be a very mindful aspect to the poem, which made it feel uplifting, but not in a forced way.

As far as critically constructive feedback goes... I would experiment with flow, changing lines around, reading them out-loud to yourself/others. As well as maybe experimenting with a bit more depth.



>so much to say  
no way to say it 

What is the purpose of this opening if you're going to go ahead and put your feelings into words anyway?

As for the rest of your poem, it doesn't let us into the author's head nearly as much as it should. We don't know why the author wants to leave. We don't know what "Go fly away Be free" means either because we have no context. The whole thing is just so vague it doesn't make me care about this person or their love life.

Also,
>I look up into the sky, and gaze at the clouds  
I say to myself, what a wonderful world!  
I look up once again, and I see the sun  
I say to myself; my! Do I miss mine

The repetition here seems lazy and out of place. You know so many words, please use them.


so much to say  
no way to say it  
Be that as it may,  
I still love you  



I look up into the sky, and gaze at the clouds  
I say to myself, what a wonderful world!  
I look up once again, and I see the sun  
I say to myself; my! Do I miss mine  



I will never leave you,   
But I so very much wish I could  
I will never know another  
who can make me feel as whole  



Fresh is the wind,  
my darling little bird.  
Go fly away   



Be free  




https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/46rtc7/darkest_hour/d07mjfw

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/46p9b6/memory_lane/d07mn8h



Still want feedback though

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