Just in advance, I'm really new to reading and writing poetry, and thus there is a good chance that my feedback will not be very helpful. Anyways...

Ok, first of all, I truly enjoyed reading your poem. As I understood, it is about you watching your girlfriend as she sleeps, while she dreams of getting married. I liked the repeated structure and I thought its meter was very fluid. I especially liked the fourth line. The implication of your girlfriend dreaming of a wedding was also very well done. The separation of fantasy and reality added a lot to the poem's meaning, further distancing the marriage from real life. The last line carried a lot of meaning and I was fascinated by your word choice. "Witness" is a much harder word than "see" or "look at," and it somewhat broke the meter, which made it even stronger. As for criticism, I can't really think of much at he moment. Is "breast" in the second line supposed to be singular? Also, changing the "And" in the last line to "while" might m

Beautiful.  Delicate, precious, a tad sensual, and very gently, yet painted lightly with a touch of the grim, as the final line implies that maybe the speaker doesn't want to get married just yet.  In only a handful of small lines you have crafted a gorgeous image layered with psychological and emotional depth.  Fantastic job, I don't have anything to add to you.

    She dreams of ringing bells,

    Her slender arms curve against her shallow breathing breast

    She dreams of fallen roses,

    The shadows dance upon her gently parted lips

    She dreams of final blessings,

    Her back arches with the ebbing moon

    She dreams of me

    And I witness her

Note: I wrote this poem when my girlfriend and I were going through difficult times.



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She Dreams of Ringing Bells