Thank you for the feedback. Your explanation of my own title makes me like it a lot more haha.

You really packed a lot of fun devices into this little poem. The whole thing just reads extremely enjoyably, and it certainly doesn't need much revision, if any. Great work! 

I saw you asked another commenter for thoughts on a title... personally I really like "Toys" as it is. It's playful and intriguing, much like the poem itself. 

I love this poem! It made me smile. If anything, I would add periods after "bust" and "must." It does not need them, though.

I personally like the title. It adds to the playfulness of the poem.

I am notoriously terrible with titles. Most of my own works remain untitled until someone else demands one or assigns one to them

About the only variation of your title (which is good ((as is the rest of the poem)), has multiple meanings, and is fitting) I can come up with is Bob, but I'm not sure how many people would translate that into Battery Operated Boyfriend ;) 

What would you title this just out of curiosity?

I had a chuckle. Overall, I like it. It's short, sweet, and to the point.

A little epigram I made 
    
    Toys 

    With one thrust 
    He tends to bust.
    Girl, that boy 
    Makes toys a must.

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