Yeah haha (: I realise now that i wasn't nearly as good as i thought. I wrote it in the middle of the night when i couldn't sleep. I feel asleep just a few minutes after i posted it.  
It was just something fun and sort of experimental, really just wanted to have a plot twist in a poem, and i think i managed that. Though maybe not as good as i could if i was fully awake and aware. But i think i did ok (;

Thank you for the feedback, it is much appreciated.

the poem is all together pretty good. But i cant find a rhythm in the first stanza and also some of the wording is quite basic and cliche. Still enjoyed reading, loved the last 2 lines

I like the back and forth tone of the lines quite a bit, it has a swaying perspective that I think you kind of nailed with the title.

I find the rhyme scheme in the beginning to flow like a song and I liked it , but on the other hand, by the end of the poem it was a bit repetitive , beat-wise.  

All in all , I like the tone and the angle you went for, would have loved to have more to read though!

She hates him  
He is grieving and aching  
He loves her   
She is leaving, he is shaking  
Thoughts are cold, head is freezing  
Hearth is burning, she is sleeping
  
Cause of never ending strife and that she is a bad wife,   
he is feeling nice with a sharp knife   
Because of my freezing hot soul.  
Tonight I might be ending a life  

[1. Anxiety](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/59lqi2/anxiety/d99kjws/)  
[2. Inferno](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/59lt4w/inferno/d99jvec/)

Freezing hot