Thank you for your feedback. 

I did look up the past tense of plead when posting this, but without it the rhyme is broken, so it stayed. Perhaps I could spell it "pled" to be clear as to how I intended it to be said, even though that is not a real word.

An Explanation for the flow; it copies the flow of another of my poems (which doesn't flow well either) and is meant to respond/refer to the other poem, if you were puzzled at my rhyme or reason for the odd structure.

I think "pleaded" is what you want.  "Plead" does not follow the logic of "read," if I am correct.

Also, I feel like this would do much better if there were more grammatically complete sentences, as opposed to phrases strung together.  It can be tricky to see how it is supposed to flow in its current state.

I'm really glad you enjoyed my poem, and thank you for your kind words. I rather like the ending myself, and it's nice to see that is shared. Thanks!


Wow. I'm very moved by this. I think the strongest line is the last, especially with how you end it. Endings are very important, they need to stick in the reader's mind long after they've finished reading. And it should make going back over a piece feel like reading it for the first time. The ending to your poem did this for me. Job well done.

    But even so, death touches all things
    Oft heedless of how fair
    Though times seems to spite
    Any joy or hope in the living
    Touching all is not unfair
    I only wish that hand might spare
    A pretty song hearkening to flight.
    As I cradled that dying feather, I plead
    Alas; fallen unto this foul ground, stricken, she bled


[1](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/54iumq/my_shell/d82fty0/) [2](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/5anhkf/a_peoem_i_wroat/d9hytv3/)

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