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xo_ambitious_love

Bitch Be Heartiess

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Bitch be heartless.

Throw your heart into the river live a stone.

Hang your love to dry like a lynched man,

Don’t come back to the scene.

Leave the crime bloody and make it be known,

That a bitch is heartless.

That you are heartless.

That you lost your heart to someone you loved and trusted.

But you was used and abused.

And as God repaired you,

He forgot your heart, and you forgot yourself.

And a new person is made, a new you is seen.

But the heart that geared you soul into movement,

Is in the ditch covered up with bones and locks.

The boney cold hands that tried to take it.

Died by its touch and by its radiance.

You heart is a atomic bomb.

Because a bitch is heartless.

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Posted Nov 16, 2016, 8:01 AM UTC

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corpus_vile•

Love the Titty

Love the titty
I mean the tittle
I mean the created
Spongings
I mean the creative
Spoilings. How
Did you ever find the guts
To post this?

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dirtyLizard•

Bitch Be Heartiess

Heartless

Throw your heart into the river live a stone.

like

You heart is a atomic bomb.

an

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gwrgwir•

But you was used and abused.

was -> were.

The boney cold hands that tried to take it.

boney -> boney

Overall, I don't see a lot to this piece - it's all a single, simple, repeated concept, like a diss track where the rapper harps on the same point over and over. Where's the progression, the interpretation, the why instead of the what?

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