Line breaks would be helpful here!
I never listened to any lil peep, it always is rough when someone you listen to passes away, like the songs become macabre. Nice rap sorta flow.

i saw the word 'underworld' and it made me want to write about teenage mutant ninja turtles because artists are the underground heroes, passing difficult secrets to unlock for ages... unless you had the cipher in your pocket

I love the first verse. I felt the overarching theme is toxic relationships and the way they ruin you like drug addiction which is great symbolism.

I had a friend 
A firework spent
Roman candle
 to the underworld 
The moon’s eyes’ 
drip wet

Sweet syllable placement
Giving poison a beautiful face
But to me my friend is a hero
Because he left home to save himself 

Tell me awful things. I loved dammit. Cocaine. 
You could have been my best friend
Now you’re just a name.
Rest In Peace 
lil peep
Some get called home sooner or later.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7v6cig/shrodingers_cat/?st=JD8TKSTK&amp;sh=e3210738

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/7v6b0x/met_a_girl_today/?st=JD8TLFV5&amp;sh=80cf67e7

Goth rIp