Man, I disagree with your clouds or sky comment -- the bed of clouds is heaven (spent with angel-boy).

Now op, I like this sentiment, but it just feels too cognitively stagnant. Poetry is full of angels, subvert this somehow for a better oomph. Also use line breaks. Keep at it!

It’s sounds great,I really like the poem’s simplicity makes it sound peaceful. 
Though the poem lacks clouds or sky references (or maybe try a new title) 

Ahh yes I did forget ahah this is my first post on here so I’m still figuring things out! Thank you!

I think you forgot to add the line breaks which are actually 2 presses of the enter key not 1, I made this mistake often. Although if it was not a mistake I advise adding breaks so the poem could flow better :0 Love the simple wanting in this piece!!

Yeah I definitely understand that, thanks for the response! I definitely try to go for the more simplistic style of writing but sometimes it’s hard to find a balance that’s just right! I will play with this poem a bit and try to add more

I think you have the core of a poem but in my opinion you can develop it further. As it is, it‘s sweet but simple. But as a reader I feel like i‘m missing a lot of info like who is the boy why does he make you feel like that etc. so i‘d vote for a longer poem

Ill know I️ have reached 
the promised land 
When every night 
my dreams align with reality 
And I️ share a mattress 
with the boy
Who made me an angel




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Bed of clouds [feedback request]