Uncertainty

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I am new here and not a native speaker, so I would appreciate any feedback on the language, but of course also on the content!

I had the chance
I screwed it up
Made no advance
Been sold a pup

By inner lag
Of confidence
To simply check
If my plush plans

To conquer you
Romantically
Could become true
I can't foresee

Do you like me
Will it be love
A state-to-be
Or do I bluff

Myself when I
Pretend that you
Deem me the guy
For honeymoon

Just possibly
Just as a thought
My only plea
I only sought

You letting me
Know what you think
If you agree
There is this link

Between us two
Please see it too
I'd like to woo
Just one, just you

I fall asleep
And in my dreams
My deep thoughts keep
As it then seems

You vivid at
A sparkling space
It's in my head
Where I embrace

Not only you
On top of this
But two by two
Togetherness

When you appear
On my life's stage
And when you sphere
Me, you engage

A humble youth
With all your traits
Stunned so in sooth
I ask the Fates

To stand by me
When I'm with you
Audacity
To say what's true

You make the play
A comedy
You make my day
A time of glee

Words failed me though
What is the key
My greatest foe
Hesitancy

My fear was real
I did not dare
Dwell on appeal
The spell was there

What am I lost
In universe
What does it cost
To flee my curse

I just wish luck
I just wish pluck
A mix of both
And finally
Your lover's oath

Posted Feb 28, 2018, 9:02 PM UTC