The lack of punctuation was intentional. I think it adds a cool layer to the poem for the reader to figure out. For example the first two lines.  
  
> when the sun pries  
> my lazy eyes open through my blinds  
  
These line could be read as if there was a comma after the first line (which is why there is lineation is the way it is). It could also be read without the punctuation, “when the sun pries my lazy eyes open through my blinds,” and it still makes sense. As in the sun shining through window blinds to the speakers eyes.  
  
> the sun shies  
> unaroused resumes my night  
  
I feel like this line is really where lack of punctuation shines because the word unaroused can be used to describe both the sun and the manner in which night resumes.  
  
> there isn’t really much in the actual poem to indicate what it is about apart from the title.  
  
“I cry the sky strokes and strikes of me till the sun shies unaroused resumes my night.” = I use my jizz the cloud the sky until the s

I really liked this poem, although I think that putting some punctuation in would help it to flow in the way that you want it to. It's an interesting topic to write a poem on, but there isn't really much in the actual poem to indicate what it is about apart from the title, maybe put in a few extra lines in the middle about addiction in general? I really like the last line and specifically the word order for it, more of it through the poem would be really cool I think.

So I wanted there to be a sort of lazy theme with this shown through the lack of punctuation and standard grammar practices. I wonder, am I pushing it too far by not adding at?

What I like about this is the way it sounds when read out loud-- I find that often shorter poems like this discount rhythm, and I think this works very well sonically. Some minor things: I'd change the word "my" in the first stanza to "the," because I feel like it just sounds better. I also think crying "at" the sky would fit more, as well. As it stands it feels like you missed an article there. 

i liked it because it's short and condensed. you don't need a myriad of verses to get a point across. 

when the sun pries  
my lazy eyes open through my blinds  
i arise and cry the sky  
strokes and strikes of me  
till the sun shies  
unaroused resumes my night  
  
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