Time is a loan shark, and debt is always due.  I truly enjoyed your beautiful words.  Thank you so much for reading.

This poem is truly a work and I admire the elongation of format to emphasize the longing for the one you are writing of. Additionally, I admire how you begin from birth and move through life to death. Time may separate us from the ones we lost, but we hold them within our hearts; you have given them life in your expression. I hope that you find peace - thank you for sharing.

Thank you for the feedback.  I need to work on my fluidity and flow.  Thank you for reading.

I like the use of formatting to tell a story, however I think this particular monospace font and "programmed" feel doesn't fit your piece as it os more of a classical nature. The poem itself is great though. A few cliches, but not sappy and consistent metaphors throughout. Good work!

    I found a birthing  
    in your eyes  
    gestation of soul  
    a quenched smile  
    going on,  
              mile  
                     after  
                            mile  
&amp;nbsp;  

    mapped with your heart  
    for every inch, I will chart  
&amp;nbsp;

    till time,  
             tears  
                     us  
                         apart  
&amp;nbsp;

    Mourning your death  
    longing your gaze  
    setting sail  
&amp;nbsp;

    to leave this haze  
&amp;nbsp;  

    to not feel your breath  
    is a crime  
    for we are only separated  
    by time  
    soon, I'll reach heaven  
    and hold you in my arms,  
    forever  
&amp;nbsp;

    in time  
&amp;nbsp;
&amp;nbsp;

[1](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/87b95z/the_desert_sky/)  

[2](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/87mm98/bird_of_prey/)  