But what hurts? and why does it hurt? You've done well to show me that *something* hurts, but not why/whom/where/when/or what.

The rhymes feel a bit contrived and forced. This seems like a piece that would lend itself well to free form rather than AAAA, BBBB, CCCC, etc rhyme structure.  

If you're going to rhyme, the your rhythm needs to support that rhyme. Unfortunately there are few lines where the rhythm over extends itself to force that rhyme, ergo there are sections that plod rather than sing. 

I'd nix the imagery of broken angel wings. It terms of cliched imagery, that's like, in the top 10 of cliched images. There is a lot of tactile, human body based, images so in the spirit of tonal consistence, I'd stick with a tactile body based image for the 2nd to last line. There is no need to introduce heavenly imagery when there wasn't a whiff of it in the preceding lines. There's no precedent so it sticks out, sorely. 

This is ok, and its going places, but I think its being held ba

the overall usage of the rhyme scheme made the poem flow very easily

I don’t know if I should see you today  
What I feel is difficult to portray  
A flood of emotions, too much for a spillway  
And it’s all in my head, stuck on replay...  


I fight with my mind to abstain  
But I can’t help but to feel the pain  
I close my eyes feeling the drain  
I’m back, stuck on replay… again.  


The end so near, the tears are here  
What a long flight through this painful frontier  
I close my eyes afraid to peer  
And it’s that replay... My life’s premiere.  


I just can't hold it all  
Past my hearts protective wall  
On broken angel wings I fall  
Because there is nothing left for me at all  



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