I've been writing for a while now and would love feedback on one of my poems

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Can't Seem To Forget

As I walk alone,

Down the quiet road.

Whispers of the past,

Conjured within my thoughts,

Save for the last.

Your image burned,

Like a photograph in my mind.

The way you turned,

Showing every emotion but kind.

I left in a hurry,

Dazed but not confused.

My sight grew blurry,

My love had been misused.

I try in vain,

Yet I can't seem to forget.

I grimaced in pain,

By the sight of your silhouette.

And I knew at that moment,

I would never forget.

Feedback and criticism is greatly appreciated, thank you!

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Posted May 29, 2018, 12:59 AM UTC · edited

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