Just a poem I wrote. It’s not great but it’s what came out and it is kind of how I think, just spruced up for a poem. I titled it simply “Thoughts of My World”

To the surly skies that drop sparks

To the earth that lie with such calm

To whom do i owe the pleasure,

Of the scarlets and seas of light?

The ones that fill my eye

The ones that seize my heart

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How shall I walk in the green?

With a fearful and cautious demeanor

I wonder if it shall be my last moment

Last to breathe

Last to hear

Last to witness the beauty of a tragedy

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To bear such a burden

Knowing that I am but one

One who cannot possibly see all

Every moment of awe

Every spectacle that shall inspire

Every pleasure our earth is to offer

How could one do as such,

And not be driven mad with desire?

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Night has come and I lie still

I stare into the windows

The ones high above the dark

Shining so brilliantly

I shall pluck the light from each

And take to my heart

So that I may find solace in such

And I wonder,

Is there another who does the same?

Through that light and on his side,

Does he stare right back?

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EDIT: I'm having trouble formatting it properly because I'm stupid sometimes. i added the lines to separate the stanzas and make it a little more clear. I hope you enjoy