Two cents gets your throat slit

Holy shit, this is awesome! The imagery, the attitude, the who-gives-a-fuck disposition in the face of uncertainty - I loved it!

Also, Southern Comfort our of plastic cups brings back a very specific childhood memory.

Awesome poem. I really love the tone that comes through with the words that you chose; it definitely is something that I don't see too often. The first half of the poem sets a pretty vivid picture of the intended setting, with the second half bringing a stark contrast with a great transition using the pennies.

‘Bout a southern girl

Made a devil of a deal with another girl

Not sure if repetition was intended here, but these lines are the only parts of the poem that I don't believe flow as well as the rest, though their meaning and placement in the poem are justified. It's very minor, but I thought I should let you know.

“Thats why im throwing all my pennies towards the wishing well”

The power of that sentence and what follows after just gives it an entire new dimension of emotion for me while i was reading this.These words come across as very honest in their feeling which is why i think its beautifully written,well done.

Wow. Really creates a powerful image in the mind. "That’s why I’m throwing all my pennies | Towards the wishing well | Hoping one will land | And help me write a rent check" Love it! its so effective!

Thanks for the feed back! I tried to rhyme southern and another to make it feel like a new rhyme, even though girl is stuck at the end of both lines. I will look into ways on making more fresh and strong.

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