Checkers

Pencil, paper, pad;
Broken, torn, unwritten.
Lonely, crazy, sad;
Me, mum, dad.

You might find this on wattpad ( yes, I know) as I posted it there, but I showed it to a friend the other day and they said it was good, so I thought I'd get some more thoughts on it.

Two pieces of feedback:
https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/94n90t/ocean_sounds/e3o33a2/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/94n9ly/a_shadow/e3o2vag/