[2996] Virgin Dawn: Chapter 1

Hello Destructive Reader,

I wrote a short story titled Virgin Dawn that I'd like some feedback on. The genre is high fantasy and heroic romance. It's about six chapters, but I will be posting only the first chapter for now since the full story is a hefty 26k words. The story itself actually has erotic scenes in certain chapters, but chapter 1 is clean.

EDIT: I just added a NSFW tag. There is some gore. My apologizes.

Here's a teaser:

It is a time before the formation of the Devlani Royal Resistance. Aria Schezobraska has returned to the capital city of Devlan, back to the army that she had so long deserted. When James Stromiskar catches word that she might be in danger, he disguises himself and sneaks into the city of his hateful father, to find Aria before it is too late.

Read Virgin Dawn: Chapter 1 Here

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