The Best. The Worst

I like the idea and parts of structure but I feel like it lacks some meat to its bones, and while I think repetition can be useful, in this case it might be a bit boring. Add some depth. Play with some of the words. If you're going to be simple in structure toss in some complex/pretty vocab.

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Sorry, this is my first reddit anything, I don't really know the unwritten rules, and my opinion is prob useless.

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I like the structure. Also the closing sentiment of the last section ties things together well. I’d work on maybe giving more weight to the third section, it feels thin

I like the repetition of this but also feel like it would also tie together a lot better if there was maybe a rhyme scheme? it’s pretty cool though it reads like a mantra or chant

It feels like a declaration without really any explanation. It might be improved by some fleshing out of the premise, some illustrations of the idea put forth. Unrelatedly, I like the fancy lines at the bottom.

I feel like you were going for a simple message and I dig it! It's repetitive but I feel like that's what you were going for because the whole point of the poem was that life is a cycle of good and bad. In a way, it reminds me of the chicken and the egg argument because how do we really know what comes first? I understand what the comments below are saying about how there's not a lot going on and I'm not completely sure if my takeaway from your poem is correct but I can appreciate the simplicity of your poem! I enjoyed reading it!