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See also: knee jerk reaction
You can steal all you want
But in the end regurgitation
Lead to choking on bile
And ulcers and sweat
You're better off just starving
S.W.
Posted Jul 15, 2019, 3:19 AM UTC
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It's hard to make much sense of the piece as-is, since the character's undefined as is their relation to the narrator. One can't really choke on ulcers, and I'm not sold on choking on sweat without more support within the piece, but that's just me.
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I did not understand what this poem alludes to. What comes to mind are eating disorders and kleptomania, and the unconscious ways these addictions work. I like the rawness of the poem and the visceral imagery. The crispness works in its favour. Good one!
It's about plagiarism, though I did not make that clear in any form through title or alluding to the written word. I wanted to focus more on how stealing another's work just leads to pain on your own part and starving your own inspiration and creativity. I appreciate your feedback and I'm glad you enjoyed. Thanks!