[638] The Messenger

Edit: The word count could also be [746], if you look on the version being edited.

This is a short piece about a guy who is trekking through a forest with a message. For the critiques, I'd like to ask that, the first time around, you read it as a reader instead of a critiquer. Mainly for question #3.

So in addition to anything you want to say, I have a few questions:

1. Briefly, what is your synopsis of the story?
2. What do you make of the ending?
3. Was there some place where you got bored? Did Tristan's trek through the forest appear to drag on?
4. Were the italicized bits hard to follow/remember?

Here is the link to the story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/12PrwMCA8dxnLWVwe6Rm7U-hZlYf0cD3CellzJAtnspc/edit?usp=sharing

Here is the link to the story I am editing: https://docs.google.com/document/d/19938kddtib_RS6OeI1Uwum4nCdb6rdlO5J_6Kp4tSWE/edit?usp=sharing [746]

Thanks!

Critique Bank:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/j3m4vj/3721_eidolon_prologue/ + 3721

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/iyw7wo/3216_orphan_andy_and_nick_hide_in_berkeley_with/ + 3216

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/j2jt73/2049_vainglory_new_chapter_2_1/ + 2049

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/j1jhq2/2192_kingdoms/ - 2292

This: - 746

Total: 5948