Quite a unique, interesting poem - I interpreted it as a love poem and I quite enjoyed reading it. Free form poetry can sound clunky at times, but overall I think yours flowed decently (although I'm no expert)

I was confused as to what the line "If your meanders dry out without any thirst to less" meant though, even after reading it a few times, and it seemed to break the flow a bit.

Nice poem overall :)

Thankyou for your reply I really appreciate it!

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I really really love the line "I might as well be lost in the world, and found inside you." Woah that one hits really hard. I also quite enjoy the whole second half of the poem, where the reference switches from how the other person nourishes you to how you could nourish the other person. For the first 4-5 lines, I would recommend embedding the metaphor tighter into the lines, as right now they read somewhat on the nose and wordy to me. For example, "You are the source of water to the field of sunflowers in my heart," might hit more poignantly if it were something like "You are the water for my heart's sunflowers." Just a suggestion though, take it with a grain of salt!

I really like the line ''Then maybe in another lifetime     I'll be the source''

it  rhymes really well and shows a really serious tone to a desperate message.

I really like this poem! Its a beautiful aspect of love and yet not in the slightest cliched almost all of the imagery seems so pure and fresh and yet it has this kind of vintage vibe to it. The only thing Is the the line “found inside you” It might just be the way I’m reading it but it’d flow better if it was “found inside of you” but that is me nitpicking. Wonderful poem!

How come you don't know

You are the source of water to the field of sunflowers in my heart

You are the sky that carries the clouds in my mind

You are the hungry deer running through the woods made from my veins

And you are my eyes, because everything I see reminds me of you

I might as well be lost in the world, and found inside you

And if your beauty fades without having a loving hand to touch

If your meanders dry out without any thirst to less

Then maybe in another lifetime

I'll be the source

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