At first, I forgot a word,
then I forgot a name.
I've forgotten objects.
That's just normal claim.
Next, it was faces,
I couldn't recognize a feature.
I see them every day,
yet something was unfamiliar.
I forgot how to read.
The words looked muddled on a page.
Syllables were so foreign,
how am I supposed to earn a wage?
I think my mind is broken,
I know something isn't right.
Visited the doctor yet,
they can't diagnose my plight.
Posted Apr 14, 2021, 11:07 PM UTC
As someone who has suffered a head injury, this really kind of hit me. It seems that this writer is describing the devastating impact on losing the person that they are and still being lucid enough to know it.
Honestly this seems like a poem about the plight of someone going through the early stages of dementia. Absolutely devastating and having known close family members going through it and ultimately succumbing to the disease, I felt this poem right off the bat.
Absolutely great work. Concise, to the point and direct.
This is really moving. You capture the feel of helplessness and normal things becoming impossible for someone with a head injury in my opinion. The line "That's just normal claim." is a bit awkward and hard to understand but I can figure out what you mean. Overall this is very well done.
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