[2554] Catastrophe

Hi all,

This is my first submission to this community. You'll find my two critiques and my story linked in the bottom of this post. This is a standalone short story. Lately I’ve been reading Hemingway, Carver, and Murakami, and these authors’ styles have probably influenced this story.

Would love to know if:

• the voice works
• the story works
• if anything is boring or straight up done poorly
• anything needing major improvements and recommended authors/resources relating back to what I need to improve on
• Recommended authors to read in the same genre/vein as my story

Thanks!

[2281] Critique 1

[825] Critique 2

[2554] Story, Read-only version

[2554] Story, comments enabled version